The Man In a Room

W.A.L.T We are learning the writing structure show not tell

As the shivering man fell upon the frozen floor. The man picked himself up and limped to the back of the room. As the man dozes off there are crunching leaves and breaking branches the man awoke startled. With his heart pounding like a cheetah as the leaves and branches got louder and louder. As a creek in the door frightens him as a shadowy figure lined up with the light in the door crack. The man limps to the door to see who's there but no one is to be seen. The man begins to panic his heart is pounding like its coming out of his chest.

 As a hollow drop feel on the floor the man saw the most frighting seen a grizzly bear is on the roof. He began to limp outside the door as fast as he could the bear saw him and began to chase him. Now he is in shock panicking thinking about his family he prays for the bear not to find him. And his prayers were answered the bear left and he quickly got to the cabin as the door made a big "bang". He began to listen for a growl or something but there was silence nothing to be heard. He dozed into a dream with his family and his corer was back on track then a bang awoke him it was a gun shot. He toke a deap breath and hid in the dark so he woudn't be seen as the gun shots got bigger and bigger his lungs were pounding at each gun shot.